Help with my Shakespearean sonnet?

hmm... I'm just thinking... it seems morre comfortable to read 'she just wished' as 'just as she wished' I dunno 'she just wished' sounds a little funny to me. and is it 'she had stepped back and looked at the background' or and look back at the ground'? I'm not very good with poems but if it's the second one then using the word 'back' twice kind of spoils it a bit so I'd go with 'stepped aside' hmm.... other than those few things it's really good, I have a hard time writing poems cause I keep thinking it's going to e embarring to be all dramatic in front of a cl.